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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 311/245/330
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsGiantdots
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    There was a land
    That offered wonderful water
    Of absolute portion
    Equal its every weight

    Raided it was with
    A body of broken promises
    Anew becomes its arrangement
    Every day

    Would you be a friend
    Of One that could not empathize
    With every malady you care
    To take part in.

    When you speak out
    Can anybody hear you?

    Do you want them to?




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