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    dots Submission Name: I am still sorry.dots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 310/245/328
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsI am still sorry.dots
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    Here was your best friend
    Looking from the eyes of a child
    Standing in a cage
    Wishing you weren't there
    Like a father with an ankle bracelet
    Promised to the court
    Angry with the power
    Of a challenged God.

    Here was your best friend
    Looking after everything you did
    With a perfect judgment
    Preventing your every death

    Here was your best friend
    Teaching you the ultimate truth

    Here he was
    Held up by an infinite vise
    Sent from the Heavens
    To keep you from lies

    Here was your best friend
    Reaping the mistakes
    You presently lay burden on Him.




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      ,,,,Death, , in an air of ,," Remorse? and looking at my Burden , as an , " Weapon" ' Feeling of blood-lust Flooded my Heart , when I read<<I am Still Sorry" for this first time , A conquering ,"World , ' was further than its been, kind-da like going to see this Evil movie that has This Message, the free verse is the ways I like these facts ,,

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    Teika5
    | Posted on 2019-01-26 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]


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