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    Author: robbie
    ASL Info:    20/m/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.82 - 53/52/32
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 30
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    Time to release time to vent
    So much energy have I spent
    To show you I'm worth the chance
    Things go great then back to a defensive stance
    You take one brick down then put 3 in its place
    At this rate ill never win this race
    I put in all that I can and still I Try
    Ill stay strong as a rock but still I cry
    I'm lost I don't get what there is left to do
    I must look like a fool to you
    You open up then shut me out
    Going in circles like a round about
    You say I make you happy safe and content
    A day later a different message is sent
    I'm lost confused and some what scared
    I've told you all that I've bared
    I toss and turn with loss of sleep
    I guess to really show you my worth it wont be cheap




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