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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 304/236/304
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    It's really hard to feel sunny
    In a world that acts so passively
    About your courage to be alive

    Those without family
    Or friends with whom to discuss with
    Who made you so strong?

    In times of great epiphany,
    Do you speak or say aloud
    Or do you seek the Lord out
    To grant him your thanks?

    Wonder the wiser
    And all its abundance
    Not in fulfillment
    But in God's grace.

    It will seem most times
    That his favor is with others
    Or that she wants something else

    But look around you
    With satisfaction
    Should they question
    Let them
    Look in
    To your self.

    Submitted on 2018-12-07 02:45:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This reminds me of me when I was younger when I used to wonder why some things happened to me, thinking that life was unfair. Now, that I'm older and more experienced I must admit that I have doubts. It seems that religion or any kind of movement is corrupted by our human nature and I don't feel that we are very clever or that we make the best decisions. I reckon that we just do what is more convenient which doesn't always translate into honesty, to put it that way.

    I do happen to disagree when you say that"he world acts so passively" It seems that it is the reverse. There are so many things happening. It feels that the earth spins faster as times goes by .....

    Perhaps, I missed your point and you were referring to alienation or about being ignored. In that case I agree to some extend. One thing I have learnt is that joy shouldn't be something one gets through external factors but it must be something that comes from within otherwise one would never be happy as it would depend on issues that one can't control.

    As for some criticism, I would suggest to check out some of you line breaks, particularly at the beginning as well as at the end of the piece.

    Kind regards,


    | Posted on 2018-12-17 00:00:00 | by Ethan Brody | [ Reply to This ]

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