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    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    4.97 - 180/113/59
    Words: 1
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 596
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      It's been a long time since I have laid eyes on a romantic poem such as this. Your wording is refreshing, only I wish the composition were less like a story and more like a prose - only this is taste. Much appreciation; passion is scarce among a society that only seeks predetermination. For this, I, myself, am guilty. Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2019-03-11 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      You have good expression of your passion. However, you work way too hard to make rhymes. That detracts. Also you should avoid inversions to get end rhymes. That breaks the flow.
    | Posted on 2018-12-24 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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