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Author: Daniel Barlow
Elite Ratio:    5.93 - 2138 /2109 /1700
Words: 66
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Bam











          picture me in this moment.
          a set of eyes locked in the act
          of looking at you.

          1. Searing. 2. Warning.
          blood - warming the parts of me - i will
          put inside of you.











          a torso


     
          muscled with yearning.




Submitted on 2019-01-01 01:14:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Lots of fury here. I sense you've got a lot of mental chaos going on. Not attractive.
| Posted on 2019-03-11 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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