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    Author: Daniel Barlow
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    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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              picture me in this moment.
              a set of eyes locked in the act
              of looking at you.

              1. Searing. 2. Warning.
              blood - warming the parts of me - i will
              put inside of you.











              a torso


         
              muscled with yearning.




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      Lots of fury here. I sense you've got a lot of mental chaos going on. Not attractive.
    | Posted on 2019-03-11 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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