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    Author: Daniel Barlow
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    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    i could have done nothing.
    much as i have attempted to do something.
    i could have done nothing.
    instead - i said.
    that love was a structure - and built it up.
    and built it up.
    and thought upon it.
    and built upon it.

                        and tore it down.
                        and built it up again.


    and you see. the thing is that
    the hardships which i had thought surely must
    kill me - never did.





                        the serialized pain of it
         
    passing like shadows over the pyramids.





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