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    dots Submission Name: Mei dots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 53/167/177
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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    dotsMei dots
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    Tuti Bena
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    Somewhere between hope and hopeless
    Your battle battered me up.
    The cancer ate me away.




    Last night I put my focus on you
    I wanted to see you in my dreams
    You took me to the places you have seen
    then you showed me your final days.



    Your skinny knees......



    With the help of your hand
    Lifting underneath the knee
    To move your legs one by one



    I believe I saw your
    last meal in public


    your last signed
    receipt

    The fragile
    handwriting


    The shaken pen syndrome


    You were withering and weak
    A sack of bones depleted, void
    Of your immense energy.

    Waiting for something
    Waiting for relief

    Good grief?

    I grieve.


    Not the dream
    I'd foreseen
    Heartbreaking
    Tearing me away
    From the sheets

    Waking up crying


    In a crowd of
    A hundred thousand
    I would find you
    In a galaxy of billions
    You find me in one night

    The tears keep streaming




    Submitted on 2016-01-06 08:03:56




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