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Author: Soul-Hugger
ASL Info:    33/F/Canada
Elite Ratio:    8 - 409 /222 /66
Words: 67
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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The flow has receded to algae coated pools,
sludgy backwaters sluggish with heat,
but the corroded cliff walls remain
to show what the water took.

Layer by layer, the current bit steadily
through soil and down to bedrock.

Now, the bleached bones of nature's quarry
lie white and angular in the sun,
rock dust washed down to sea.

Submitted on 2019-02-06 20:37:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Really excellent imagery. The picture is so vivid... you feel the waste left by the water.. the barren jaggedness. Brava!
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