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    dots Submission Name: Obliviondots
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    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    5.04 - 180/110/56
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I want to write you into oblivion; out of my mind, out of my life, out of my thoughts, out of my feelings.
    You’ve weaved your essence into every synaptic nerve and I need to get you out.
    A purge of all relations, flowing through steel blue ink, maybe onto a page that will get lost with receipts in my moving boxes.
    There you’ll stay, and I will have forgotten where I put you, but that will be for the best. I’ll find new life to balance the dust that you will gather.
    But first I need to write you out: every touch, every kiss, every twirl and every sway. Every heartbeat that you felt slow down and every breath that I felt speed up. Every plan we made and every experience we embraced. Every note you sang and every word I wrote; I have to write them all into oblivion so that I can move on.




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      You're telling it like it is, isn't it. I like the style of writing. If you had handwritten this, I can almost imagine the bold, deep pen-strokes. Evokes great imagery. Especially the reference to the receipts in the moving boxes. Great stuff.
    | Posted on 2019-03-05 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]


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