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    dots Submission Name: BackLashdots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 311/245/330
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 570
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 499



    Description:
       Take on another deleted poem. I refer to them often because I think of them often. I regret quite a bit having erased my best works from this site.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsBackLashdots
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    The bold Helvetica
    Still lives on in my mind
    As the darkness consumes me
    Into a blindness exhausting of my caterer
    This body withstands the italic Georgia of my soul
    Where I had become of graduation there
    Because all I knew originated in the water
    That our land once encased
    That deeply penetrating ocean has dried to its salty face
    And the bamboo you washed up as
    Became the weapon of my enemy in a race I dare not part take in.




    Submitted on 2019-02-19 23:31:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The read is a bit , confused. To me there is alot going on here and the direction is unclear. BUt, the wordage is good to the point, i believe that if you could take a few breaths and space the stanzas , the story line will emerage and you could expand to your liken.

    Sometimes i too, miss the point by rushing in exciment, it's then when the adudance is missing what we are trying to convay .
    I like the mythical ways you have woven, your fustrating part, , i want no part of it, the Blaklash.
    | Posted on 2019-03-02 00:00:00 | by teika5 | [ Reply to This ]


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