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    dots Submission Name: Los Desechadosdots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.15 - 313/246/342
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLos Desechadosdots
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    Mirad para abajo para no tenerte que mirar
    Porque, Dios, como me has confirmado
    Que tu propósito es tan sólo para perdonar
    Mientras vas condenando a los que viven sin pecado

    Tus examenes son erroneos
    No me conoces tanto como proclamas
    No me dejas nacer, no me dejas vivir
    Como si ya no habré de morir

    Hasta la sombra de uno por la calle cruza
    Como si conmigo no hay suficiente la soledad
    Pues regreso entonces, que me esperan las paredes
    Para poder tenerle a alguien como para abrazar.




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