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Layin Tracks in Here

Author: teika5
ASL Info:    46 / m/ parts unknow
Elite Ratio:    8 - 46 /9 /20
Words: 162
Class/Type: Prose /Passion
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I got to thinking about all that is expected of us as , Humans. From the dawn till dusk. and there was a complication of what I or we should think of our experience of, this world we created , and ,"Pain" came to the fore front, that's all.

Layin Tracks in Here

Their is this , deception
they say to me, Sin is too-

when I got here ,
this place I call my location ,
my eyes were open

Now after all this conflict,
and, they , the horde
are clamoring , "it's going to get worst?"

what the hell,
is this place , our location ,
full of the ,"Foe," or what?/

"I", the being of me
took the turn
Now, " the end "
is all but consumed me

Some say this place is trouble
A ' "Hell " within it self
it has express nothing but that,

after laying tracks of my own
I wait for it ,
I know there will be pain
And, I also know my last breath will be
a bliss of letting go
to tell all this place is for me


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