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    dots Submission Name: Layin Tracks in Here dots
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    Author: teika5
    ASL Info:    46 / m/ parts unknow
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 46/9/20
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Prose/Passion
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    Bytes: 944



    Description:
       I got to thinking about all that is expected of us as , Humans. From the dawn till dusk. and there was a complication of what I or we should think of our experience of, this world we created , and ,"Pain" came to the fore front, that's all.


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    dots Layin Tracks in Here dots
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    Their is this , deception
    they say to me, Sin is too-

    when I got here ,
    this place I call my location ,
    my eyes were open

    Now after all this conflict,
    and, they , the horde
    are clamoring , "it's going to get worst?"

    what the hell,
    is this place , our location ,
    full of the ,"Foe," or what?/

    "I", the being of me
    took the turn
    Now, " the end "
    is all but consumed me

    Some say this place is trouble
    A ' "Hell " within it self
    it has express nothing but that,

    after laying tracks of my own
    I wait for it ,
    I know there will be pain
    And, I also know my last breath will be
    a bliss of letting go
    to tell all this place is for me

    pain,





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