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    dots Submission Name: Unravelingdots
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    Author: obsidiandreams
    ASL Info:    29/M/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 169/212/105
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 480
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 718



    Description:
       I write a lot of lyrics and prose, this was specifically something written for a weekly contest elsewhere. Where we were provided the image and had to write a piece around the image.


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    dotsUnravelingdots
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    *Inhale* ..... *Exhale*
    She thought she had it handled, hid her madness in the paint
    Wore her smile like a mask, but that's a candle at a grave
    Of the girl she'd been before all the damage and decay
    Before a pattern of mistakes fed that phantom in her brain
    That'd trap her in a canvas where the palette is just grey
    Where she chased a sense of passion round the gallows in a maze
    Where she lost her sense of self, and found sadness and disgrace
    Where she drowned her innocence just like a mattress in the rain
    Where she learned to let love die, and to massacre with hate
    An yet they'd put her on a pedestal, unraveling in place




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