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    dots Submission Name: just lonesome.dots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 310/239/314
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 297
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 378



    Description:
       no photos of a childhood worth sharing
    just many foul memories of a friendship with only God
    the highest and most almighty
    while i'm needing, keening, pining
    and absolutely begging for mercy
    when i have done nothing wrong.


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    dotsjust lonesome.dots
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    sitting around the table
    are four different peoples
    one with a phone and tablet
    and photos to share
    one with a cup of wine
    and a full belly
    whereas another with much to say
    and one with nothing
    the one with nothing speechless
    all stories meshed into the same concept
    of utmost contempt
    and loneliness.




    Submitted on 2019-03-24 01:59:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You can conquer foul memories with your writing. Thank you for sharing this memory. You did well.
    | Posted on 2019-04-02 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]


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