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    dots Submission Name: The Depthsdots
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    Author: obsidiandreams
    ASL Info:    29/M/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 169/212/105
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Depthsdots
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    Ash rains from the heavens,
    While contempt slowly swells
    Among a populace consuming poison,
    Cultivated of themselves

    Through dismissal of admittance & indifference
    From the childish malcontent
    We placed the weight of our decisions,
    Upon the backs of our repressed

    Who struggle for a meaning,
    Seeking freedom from the stress
    Who reached for light in darkness,
    Who could falter but instead
    Choose to grit their skin to bone
    To lift each other from the depths




    Submitted on 2019-03-30 07:08:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It brings me to moments where I have tried to leave. Yet stay.. To lift those I love with me. Thank you for this piece. It has become one of my favorites.
    | Posted on 2019-04-02 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]


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