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    dots Submission Name: i would...dots
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    Author: Awkward
    ASL Info:    246/In chains.../Q8
    Elite Ratio:    5.33 - 1606/1671/279
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 276
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 900



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       real ice and real dust: treasure trove...


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    dotsi would...dots
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    ...buy ice from your hands
    because it would take me back to the north,
    from the south
    (where-ice-is-still-thought-to-be-magical)
    yes.
    you could sell ice to me.

    and i would sell you dust from my shirt
    because it would show you what woodsmoke smells like
    and ochre
    yes.
    and sandalwood too
    and you would get a good price,
    you-buyer-of-dust-from-far-off-places...

    ice and dust,
    dust and ice,
    both trap vital clues to what went before.

    and
    we-can-if-we-want-to.

    we can send ice and dust by e-mail now
    as we send our dee-en-ay,
    no longer on a stamp now,
    but on the pages of a face book...

    so,
    i would buy real ice
    and you would receive real dust.

    and that would be alright.




    Submitted on 2019-04-02 19:23:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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