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Author: TheStillSilence ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space Elite Ratio:    4.97 - 180 /113 /59 Words: 1

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Submitted on 2019-04-22 20:54:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I really enjoyed this.. mostly. You almost lost me with how long the beginning is. Maybe that was your point? Personally, I think the poem would be improved by condensing the lead up to "I want to know more" ...everything beyond that point is Brilliant. I particularly love the way you incorporate specific scientific language. And your last line is beautifully impactful. Keep up the good work! ~Doh

| Posted on 2019-04-25 00:00:00 | by rememberplaydoh | [ Reply to This ]

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