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    dots Submission Name: Essencedots
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    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    4.97 - 180/113/59
    Words: 1
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Submitted on 2019-04-22 20:54:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed this.. mostly.

    You almost lost me with how long the beginning is. Maybe that was your point? Personally, I think the poem would be improved by condensing the lead up to "I want to know more"

    ...everything beyond that point is Brilliant. I particularly love the way you incorporate specific scientific language. And your last line is beautifully impactful.

    Keep up the good work!
    ~Doh
    | Posted on 2019-04-25 00:00:00 | by rememberplaydoh | [ Reply to This ]


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