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Essence


Author: TheStillSilence
ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
Elite Ratio:    4.97 - 180 /113 /59
Words: 1
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Essence







Submitted on 2019-04-22 20:54:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really enjoyed this.. mostly.

You almost lost me with how long the beginning is. Maybe that was your point? Personally, I think the poem would be improved by condensing the lead up to "I want to know more"

...everything beyond that point is Brilliant. I particularly love the way you incorporate specific scientific language. And your last line is beautifully impactful.

Keep up the good work!
~Doh
| Posted on 2019-04-25 00:00:00 | by rememberplaydoh | [ Reply to This ]


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