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Up in Smoke

Author: rememberplaydoh
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Up in Smoke

(written 01/13/16)

We burn our dreams..
holding the flame,
we watch the green turn to ash.
The smoke burns our lungs
and our eyes
and yet,
we find ourselves sated,
From these ashes rise new dreams.

Submitted on 2019-04-25 14:03:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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