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30/Om


Author: rememberplaydoh
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Words: 46
Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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A reflection from/on/about the space where I find my peace - outside, beside the train tracks. A meditation.


30/Om



(written 03/28/19)

The buzzing of the lines...
The hum of distant traffic...
Sun Rises
birdsong
A train crawls past...
A plane flies overhead...
Sun Sets
wind blows
Clouds float pink and orange...
Three stars shine against the blue...
Moon Rises
The buzzing of the lines...




Submitted on 2019-04-25 14:14:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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