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    dots Submission Name: On September Lipsdots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 75/191/246
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 193
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    dotsOn September Lipsdots
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    There, at the end of the road
    a rusted sign
    overgrown –
    hiding, just how far we've roamed
    from home
    into this – familiar unknown.

    Soft touch remembering
    how the future was once yours
    in the past
    alone with effervescent lips –
    of youth and years fast
    say so long to farewell,
    it's not your time yet.

    We made eye contact
    I saw you cry,
    grasp at intangible memories
    clasp them tight,
    I will do the same.

    On the cusp of September lips,
    I kiss you on the cheek
    and softly hold on
    as your life moves from autumn
    into winter –
    embrace me in warmth
    forever, my summer sun.




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