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    dots Submission Name: Dwelldots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 75/191/246
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Stories of the deep,
    creeping reprieve of peace –
    creatures made of nothing but stares.
    They’re aware
    of fragile
    fears and panic –
    confused thrashing of the horde.

    The echoes, the shouts,
    the screams and the laughs –

    Pandemonium born,
    groomed rows of perfect teeth,
    alluring promise
    of what dwells beneath.
    Stories of familiar importance
    passed between dark places
    thoughts feel unsafe.

    The falls, the traps,
    the snares and the grasps –

    Someone said
    they could smell the sweat
    of sex
    and they cried
    “me too –“
    a frenzy of something
    and little nothings
    claim going Dutch
    on passion and sanctuary.

    The predators
    dwell –




    Submitted on 2019-04-28 16:39:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Another well-written picturescape!

    Question: is the word in the last line of the first stanza supposed to be thrashing? That would seem to match the next line better...
    | Posted on 2019-04-28 00:00:00 | by rememberplaydoh | [ Reply to This ]


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