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    dots Submission Name: Spray Paint the Pearly Gatesdots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 75/191/246
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 259
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    dotsSpray Paint the Pearly Gatesdots
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    With a gentle rumble,
    gravel tumbles beneath
    the feet of turmoil.
    Grumbling stomachs of children
    fed on nothing -
    nothing but hope in "maybe"
    nothing but daydreams
    nothing but realities -
    barred unapologetically.

    We are all born
    under the same fire, night and light -
    although the wind blows
    through different trees and scenes.

    With a gentle knock,
    upon walls of rock and steel
    are tiny hands of possibility -
    chalking smiling faces
    and messages for another one,
    for someone -
    someone dear to you
    someone awaiting that "day"
    someone to bring prosperity -
    barred unapologetically.

    The charlatans would turn
    Christ away,
    dying
    corrupted humanity -
    greed and misanthropy.
    Just innocent, victims and families
    they're wailing away
    tired -
    and afraid
    at our spray painted pearly gates.




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