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    dots Submission Name: Reflectiondots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 311/245/330
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Prose/
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    dotsReflectiondots
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    In the face of agony you ignore it
    That is why you repulse me
    Finding it in you to repel the impulse of immorality
    Somewhere between the patters of water drops
    And the drop of bass in a Tool song, I ask myself
    In what ways would you blend?




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      Had to read this piece a few times. Trying to gather a true understanding of the "it". (What is it?)

    To what I can gather, "in the face of agony you ignore it" - to me, I'm allowed to be wrong here, that speaks of an abstract concept like death and the unknown. Things we don't often think about when we are feeling the pain of life.

    Repelling the impulse of immortality. What a neat line. We are all drawn to life after death over the opposite. Maybe we cannot accept the truth. Maybe Occam's razor is telling us what we don't want to hear.

    And so we've come to this part. Your title is reflection. Reflection is a tool song, (with incredible bass lines), but this feels more like a 46 & 2. This desire to be more than what you are. Overcoming this fear.

    And we blend the juxtaposition of anguish and existential dread by forming a positive from two negatives.
    Head on. Straight through the other side - whatever it is.

    Thank you for a good read
    | Posted on 2019-05-02 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]


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