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Hooked on a feeling

Author: OneDarkFlame92
ASL Info:    23/m/Numeanor
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Hooked on a feeling

it's an alarm clock radio
it's a July afternoon with no air conditioning
it's a stale burrito
it's a long walk at eleven at night
it's a black and mild cigar
it's the smell if tobacco and vanilla
it's the pine tree in the backyard
it's the oak tree in the front yard
it's a bunk bed, a rusty swing set, a flat football
it's October at night and it's still warm outside
it's spaghetti again
without meatballs this time
it's walking home from school
it's the long way
it's cheap beer in the fridge
it's only three o'clock
it's empty cans on the table
it's only three o'clock

Submitted on 2019-05-02 22:12:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I loved this, just when it was in the pits the pits got deeper. You made this work in so many wonderful ways. Bravo to you, this was wonderful!
| Posted on 2019-05-23 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
  seems like the feeling is disappointment or maybe i'm getting this wrong. that's all i can make of it from the title. i guess most people could relate to this. the repetition worked.
| Posted on 2019-05-03 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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