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    dots Submission Name: Hooked on a feelingdots
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    Author: OneDarkFlame92
    ASL Info:    23/m/Numeanor
    Elite Ratio:    5.28 - 457/422/225
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsHooked on a feelingdots
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    it's an alarm clock radio
    it's a July afternoon with no air conditioning
    it's a stale burrito
    it's a long walk at eleven at night
    it's a black and mild cigar
    it's the smell if tobacco and vanilla
    it's the pine tree in the backyard
    it's the oak tree in the front yard
    it's a bunk bed, a rusty swing set, a flat football
    it's October at night and it's still warm outside
    it's spaghetti again
    without meatballs this time
    it's walking home from school
    it's the long way
    it's cheap beer in the fridge
    it's only three o'clock
    it's empty cans on the table
    it's only three o'clock





    Submitted on 2019-05-02 22:12:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I loved this, just when it was in the pits the pits got deeper. You made this work in so many wonderful ways. Bravo to you, this was wonderful!
    | Posted on 2019-05-23 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
      seems like the feeling is disappointment or maybe i'm getting this wrong. that's all i can make of it from the title. i guess most people could relate to this. the repetition worked.
    | Posted on 2019-05-03 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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