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    dots Submission Name: el paraiso que se entiende al momento de la muertedots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
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    dotsel paraiso que se entiende al momento de la muertedots
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    me concentro en el olvido que queda de la realidad
    el alejamiento de mi persona
    el ser, el detenerse al reflejo en vez
    de someterse a las ganas de romperlo

    caminar el plano dentro de su infinito probabilidad
    ciertamente derecho, no dudoso
    la perfeccion entre los brazos
    escondida tras los huesos de mi pecho

    y por eso,
    no existo.




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