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    Author: rememberplaydoh
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 78/103/60
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsYou...dots
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    Tendril-like you slithered in
    Invading.
    Fingers drag across hot skin
    Pulse quickens
    "...arousal..."
    (or fear)

    A flush
    A breath

    Tremb'ling my soul screams out
    Like a fly in a pitcher plant
    my insides thrash
    search for escape.
    You pause.

    Feigning respect
    slink to my flank
    dripping words of doubt
    to take my mind.

    Grasping
    search for openings
    left by soulquakes -
    avalanches summoned by my howls

    Tremors in the night
    aftershocks and waves
    Memories claw
    raising bumps
    crawling across my skin
    Again




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