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    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.95 - 2136/2098/1675
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 269
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    Description:
       a patricia poem


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    it's like when you're here the blankets and the pillows
    know to pile themselves into a nest, a mattress in
    the middle of the living room

    because the noise you make in the bedroom
    is too much for the upstairs neighbours.

         

    everything is still and ordered





    Submitted on 2019-05-25 15:27:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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