Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.94 - 2138/2101/1700
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 570
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 375



    Description:
       a patricia poem


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsdots
    -------------------------------------------


    you sat me down, deliberately, purposely, looked me in
    the eye and told me you loved me. put a shot in my neck -
    until i was affected similarly. and love being the way that it is, and with you being so agonizingly. deliciously, so tortuously
    present - it's hard to comprehend you



    could just vanish




    Submitted on 2019-05-25 16:03:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Oh Love !
    So much blood has been spilled;
    lives ruined;
    nations destroyed;
    ... and yet
    here we are in 2020 continuing to put ourselves through it !

    I like to think that some wonderful person actually did
    sit you down, and deliberately and purposely, looked you in
    the eye and told me that they loved you !

    That would be worth writing poetry about!
    That would be worth relocating to chase a dream because life is so short and each of us need to be told.

    I hope you are well Daniel.
    | Posted on 2020-07-08 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    202429

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry