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    dots Submission Name: For seriousdots
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    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.95 - 2136/2098/1674
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       a patricia poem


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    dotsFor seriousdots
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    you sat me down, deliberately, purposely, looked me in
    the eye and told me you loved me. put a shot in my neck -
    until i was affected similarly. and love being the way that it is, and with you being so agonizingly. deliciously, so tortuously
    present - it's hard to comprehend you



    could just vanish




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