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    dots Submission Name: Things become tangleddots

    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.96 - 2136/2096/1674
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       a trish poem

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    dotsThings become tangleddots

         and now my love is just your love.
         my need for you is your need.
         my passion, your passion,
         my sense of displacement finds you struggling and lost.
         you emit
         a pitch that i emit - and we meet.


         i am in you

    Submitted on 2019-05-25 18:58:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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