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    dots Submission Name: untitled#1dots

    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.96 - 2136/2096/1674
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       a trish poem

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         as it is i challenge you to be anywhere and not be shocked,
         the longing in your chest - an equal brand of wellness, and from
         that one thing in which you are deficient,
         your fingers, restless as tentacles,


                                                      reaching for my hand

    Submitted on 2019-05-26 00:26:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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