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    Author: Daniel Barlow
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    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       a patricia poem


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    you will understand me when i say this, how i can go outside to smoke and the buildings the night sky and the stars have a
    position, and i am there, and you are somewhere - but
    the thing is we have a history, and we have built it,
    by little bit. and by little bit.



    like how we fucked in the back of my car at Walmart for four hours

    and wound up making love








    Submitted on 2019-05-26 01:59:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    i guess the thing was - that time after you got the sweat and thanked me for holding you - i wanted to thank you for allowing

    me to hold you

    | Posted on 2019-05-26 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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