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    dots Submission Name: The Inatedots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 310/245/328
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
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    dotsThe Inatedots
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    Bodies flowering from the bed of corpses
    Sink into the mud with hopeless abandon

    To shed a shadow over eternal light
    Would that not mean that I Am God?

    To dispose of what has met its plane
    The limitations to His promise




    Submitted on 2019-06-03 21:18:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i am distrustful of people who know what inate is about.



    the poem/prose is good.
    each couplet yields much.
    | Posted on 2019-06-04 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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