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    Author: Daniel Barlow
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    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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                             addressing love, as if it were a person.

         

                             being direct (again).















         + i know the process of breathing
         + i know the purpose of air
         + you

         

    were something beneath the surface.







    Submitted on 2019-06-05 01:27:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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