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    dots Submission Name: Forgetting Youdots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 368/365/171
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsForgetting Youdots
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    Don’t dare take the moon-

    Snatching her for yourself like you’ve done my heart
    Stuffing her deep into your linty skirt pocket
    Like nothing more than a burnt penny

    The space between us laments our absence

    I am a quivering sparrow in your hands
    Your fingertips are my sustenance
    The song in your eyes
    Fell into mine and rose in fire and revolution

    I will sing to you in the evening
    When the pines are most solemn
    And the foxes most austere

    I will cling to you as the white sorrow clings to a wet stone
    The way solitude silhouettes the daisy

    Unfurl the night-

    The stars fall like pirouetting fireflies
    That perish at dawn
    Their flame dissolving into the blue of day

    I lost you in the oblivion of a bell
    The infinite dissipation that resounds within all of us

    “Eternal sunshine of the spotless mind”

    The forgetting of you-

    particle
    by
    particle-

    every moment we held in time-
    every nuance between us-

    by John-Paul Cosentino




    Submitted on 2019-06-22 15:50:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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