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Submission Name:
Forgetting You
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Author:
rev.jpfadeproof
ASL Info:
27/m/nyc
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6.05 - 368/366/172
Words:
187
Class/Type:
Poetry/Misc
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Forgetting You
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Don’t dare take the moon-
Snatching her for yourself like you’ve done my heart
Stuffing her deep into your linty skirt pocket
Like nothing more than a burnt penny
The space between us laments our absence
I am a quivering sparrow in your hands
Your fingertips are my sustenance
The song in your eyes
Fell into mine and rose in fire and revolution
I will sing to you in the evening
When the pines are most solemn
And the foxes most austere
I will cling to you as the white sorrow clings to a wet stone
The way solitude silhouettes the daisy
Unfurl the night-
The stars fall like pirouetting fireflies
That perish at dawn
Their flame dissolving into the blue of day
I lost you in the oblivion of a bell
The infinite dissipation that resounds within all of us
“Eternal sunshine of the spotless mind”
The forgetting of you-
particle
by
particle-
every moment we held in time-
every nuance between us-
by John-Paul Cosentino
Submitted on 2019-06-22 15:50:01
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