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Author:	rev.jpfadeproof
ASL Info:	27/m/nyc
Elite Ratio:	6.08 - 368/364/166
Words:	187

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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Forgetting You dots

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Don’t dare take the moon-

Snatching her for yourself like you’ve done my heart
Stuffing her deep into your linty skirt pocket
Like nothing more than a burnt penny

The space between us laments our absence

I am a quivering sparrow in your hands
Your fingertips are my sustenance
The song in your eyes
Fell into mine and rose in fire and revolution

I will sing to you in the evening
When the pines are most solemn
And the foxes most austere

I will cling to you as the white sorrow clings to a wet stone
The way solitude silhouettes the daisy

Unfurl the night-

The stars fall like pirouetting fireflies
That perish at dawn
Their flame dissolving into the blue of day

I lost you in the oblivion of a bell
The infinite dissipation that resounds within all of us

“Eternal sunshine of the spotless mind”

The forgetting of you-

particle
by
particle-

every moment we held in time-
every nuance between us-

by John-Paul Cosentino

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.