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    dots Submission Name: Ardentdots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 230/392/144
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 85
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    dotsArdentdots
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    I know this isn’t forever.
    Painstakingly, Time
    peels back all the soft quilts
    we make of our lives.

    The bed of knives known always
    under the layers, but laying down
    the prick surprises us
    between the shoulder blades.

    That final, simple betrayal.

    Still, still
    let’s finish this square together,
    let the light wander the trees
    let the fields grow wild
    and my heart love—
    all its fervent love—




    Submitted on 2019-06-25 12:28:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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