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Author: saartha
ASL Info:    27/F/US
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Tired of stars
and little blue planets

sometimes an ape
must be an ape

peel the white
bitter pith

let the juice
flood sweetly in.

Submitted on 2019-06-25 12:28:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You know, I’m calling this summer the “summer of peaches”. Enjoying what seasons off us is Life at its most simple...and isn’t simplicity the grandest luxury of life? A simple, “ordinary” peach, can touch our tongues with Epiphanies.

I believe that’s what you mean here. That we can become weary with philosophy and poetry and profundities- and that sometimes it’s good to be bestial. To enjoy the simple, in simplicity, and let it fill us to the brim.

I love the message you get across so quickly and so succinctly in this piece. It has great word pictures and grounds the reader in what matters most- stopping to enjoy the simple things that we are blessed with.

Well done!
| Posted on 2019-06-30 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]

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