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    dots Submission Name: Orangedots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 230/393/145
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsOrangedots
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    Tired of stars
    and little blue planets

    sometimes an ape
    must be an ape

    peel the white
    bitter pith


    let the juice
    flood sweetly in.




    Submitted on 2019-06-25 12:28:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You know, I’m calling this summer the “summer of peaches”. Enjoying what seasons off us is Life at its most simple...and isn’t simplicity the grandest luxury of life? A simple, “ordinary” peach, can touch our tongues with Epiphanies.

    I believe that’s what you mean here. That we can become weary with philosophy and poetry and profundities- and that sometimes it’s good to be bestial. To enjoy the simple, in simplicity, and let it fill us to the brim.

    I love the message you get across so quickly and so succinctly in this piece. It has great word pictures and grounds the reader in what matters most- stopping to enjoy the simple things that we are blessed with.

    Well done!
    | Posted on 2019-06-30 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]


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