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    dots Submission Name: Tidaldots

    Author: OneDarkFlame92
    ASL Info:    23/m/Numeanor
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 461/425/227
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    The memories rolled in like clouds over a starry sky
    The faint chirping of crickets is swallowed by the roaring of waves

    Eternity fights hard against the endlessness
    And it starts to rain.

    A cold Summer night
    Moonlight can still be seen,
    gently kissing the palm trees

    Vastness is an ocean
    Forever are the stars reflected in the water
    Details are in the wind,
    blowing away footprints in the sand

    You should be here

    Submitted on 2019-07-05 22:13:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The general idea I’m getting from this piece is that something or another is being obscured by something else.

    Ie. Clouds roll over the stars/crickets chirping swallowed by waves/footprints being blown away

    You use nice imagery to get listlessness across. The sense I’m getting is that of despair. As if you’ve lost and or are yearning for a lover or a time of love gone by. Maybe childhood and the sweet memories of family.

    Overall, I think you did a good job here. Well done.

    PS if we start commenting, others will join in.
    | Posted on 2019-07-06 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]

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