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    dots Submission Name: Outside the Chaindots
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    Author: Wolfwatching
    ASL Info:    28/Male/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    7.62 - 96/138/119
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsOutside the Chaindots
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    there's no "on the"
    as in
    the train is moving swiftly on the tracks
    I mean does it? Do that? Swiftly?

    In my mind it's garbled up like a big picture
    I should say is conjured up
    the way that more and more we're thinking visual
    and again more and more?

    Do we do that? It's sliding round some mountain
    I imagine, or curling a cliff, or out on the bay
    but there's no on the, or outside of, or anything
    Probably it's just an ad for nescafé

    I mean what is outside
    And how would you describe the light
    Without ever falling into corporate speak

    I would say "there is something unintelligble
    Going on outside. The thing you can't describe
    with words now, is half happening outside."




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      An undisclosed event has disturbed the lineations on anonymous pages before glyphs could be captured in the texture of these flat inert slabs.
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