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    dots Submission Name: Hazy Half-Moondots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.05 - 368/366/171
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 268
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Another quick rhyming piece. I haven’t written in years and I’m just trying to break through this writers block.


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    dotsHazy Half-Moondots
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    Hazy half-moon
    Hanging in the silver sky.
    Celestial, half-closed eye,
     
    My sparrow swoons
    At your skipping lips
    Spitting rhymes and lullabies.
     
    She is nested at my side,
    Heavy head full with dreams
    Tucked between my ribs and seams.
     
    © DICICCO COSENTINO
     
     
     




    Submitted on 2019-07-10 02:05:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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