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    dots Submission Name: Fizzy Lovedots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.07 - 368/364/171
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 111
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    Bytes: 1698



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    dotsFizzy Lovedots
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    The moon
    Is a pop-top can
    Of Soda
    Pop
    Popped
    And
    Poured
    Over our heads.
    The fizzy stars
    Shot upwards
    As crystal
    Cannonballs
    Shimmer down
    And explode
    On my
    Tongue.
    The twizzle of tousled
    Bubbles
    Bursting
    Across my
    Body
    Reminds me of love.
    Of how loving
    You
    Can be
    Effervescent when
    Lying
    Under each other
    And
    Visceral while
    Lording
    Over.
     
    After all
    There is a biological
    Basis for
    Love
    And
    Hate.
    Studies conducted have
    Shown that the same
    Neurological
    Circuits activate both
    Passions-
    The sun
    Crawling
    Into the pop-top can
    Moon
    Chasing bubbles
    Until the moon burst
    Like fireworks on a hot 4th of July.
     
    Perhaps this is why
    Our love is irrationally fizzy.
    Refreshing
    At times
    But
    Explosively
    Fizzy.
     
    Did not Romeo
    Pop
    His pop-top
    moon
    When Juliet
    His sun
    Ceased to fizzle?
    Soul love
    Is incorrigibly
    Irrational
    Like a soda-pop
    Shaken and
    Its pop-top
    Popped
    Until all its contents
    Hopped
    Out
    And bopped
    The bodies nearest.
     
    So I guess what I’m trying to say is:

    Baby,
    Let’s
    Get
    FIZZY...
     
    ©DiCicco Cosentino
     
     
     
     
     

     




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