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    dots Submission Name: Would You...dots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 368/365/171
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWould You...dots
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    If I slept with my back towards you,
    Would you bite my shoulder like night bites the yellow Elm?
    Would you fold me into yourself
    Like fireflies fold the stars within?
    Would you carry them in pails like dreams
    And empty them into the lulling sea?

    If you could, would you lasso the moon and sink it in my cup of tea?

    ©️DiCicco Cosentino




    Submitted on 2019-07-24 10:05:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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