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    dots Submission Name: After a Dreamdots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 41/64/78
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 99
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1085



    Description:
       A re write of an old poem after a dream


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    dotsAfter a Dreamdots
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    I am here

    I am here

    right here

    not over there

    where the cliffs go
    down to the 
    spines
    of the deep blue sea

    I am here

    I am here

    right here
    beside you

    looking over
    the world

    Listening to the 
    hooves of steel

    clattering the land 
    for miles.

    look right here
    right here

    not over there
    where the cliffs go

    down to the spines 
    of the deep blue sea.

    I am here
    I am here

    right here
    right here

    beside you

    you are beautiful
    With your angelic wings

    let's fly far
    So as not to fall
    to the
    spines of the
    deep blue sea.

    I am here

    I am here

    right here
    beside you

    not falling
    to the spines
    of the
    deep blue sea




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