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    Author: Daniel Barlow
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       trish trillion


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    So Trish, there is this movie i was watching, 'Snowpiercer'
    given a Utopian setting where the low end of our society is trapped in the back end of a compartment train.....

    metaphors, you know?
    anyway.






    The thing [the train] fairly hurtles along the tracks, it does, the frigid outside air inhospitable for living, perpetually circles the earth, it does,
    [the train].......



    And it goes,


    There are stories that in the beginning these people who were made unto such a lack, out of the compulsion toward life, maddened to eat, would cut the babies from women's pregnant
    bellies......


    grown men...
    from women's pregnant bellies........





    It was here an individual wrested a machete, hacked his arm away at the shoulder, threw that arm down on the ground and said
    to the group, "Eat this, instead."


    when
    need arose.
    gave up the leg also.






    What struck
    me about it was that that was some pretty hardcore shit,
    the measures one person would go to to get up in some people's isssssh





















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              i don't want to have to rap about it.




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