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    dots Submission Name: Lak Luster and the Laughing Yakdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.29 - 207/277/230
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLak Luster and the Laughing Yakdots
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    There is dirt under these nails
    wear on this smile
    ache in the everyday muscle
    and cracks in the tiles
    my checkered thoughts do brain

    To most I'm less, to some I'm more
    my clothes are tight, my stomach round
    my feet are sore from walking
    on nothing but the edge of an age
    with no room or peace for me

    I laugh rare, and carry false
    closer to the core and losing self
    pleasing few, and sowing felt
    because I'm feeling nothing
    but, trust the memories were true
    and the truth, it helps.

    day to day and step by step
    running away in circles to find chasing
    creature comforts and a stiff neck
    closed doors and the sad sack
    world imbalanced
    everything left is out of wack
    and I'll never love Solitude again.




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