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    dots Submission Name: Germandots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 137/246/160
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsGermandots
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    The foam is not supposed to form, betrays
    the glasses dualism
    – yin yang – until I tip it, it
    dissolves. This grainy book of photographs, gifted, I will dissect and frame –
    both German trademarks. The wine, too,
    is German.




    Submitted on 2019-10-27 09:56:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Whoa. Okay, first off I was unprepared for the amount of pain there is here. This writing only has 7 lines, but the level of turmoil here is massive. It speaks about the blatant refusal for heritage, then turns right around and immortalizes it in a photograph. This level of black and white acceptance and refusal is as upsetting as it is telling. Marvelous job doing so much with so little!
    | Posted on 2019-12-28 00:00:00 | by Trufflepiggy | [ Reply to This ]


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