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German


Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 139 /260 /173
Words: 46
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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German



The foam is not supposed to form, betrays
the glasses dualism
– yin yang – until I tip it, it
dissolves. This grainy book of photographs, gifted, I will dissect and frame –
both German trademarks. The wine, too,
is German.




Submitted on 2019-10-27 09:56:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Whoa. Okay, first off I was unprepared for the amount of pain there is here. This writing only has 7 lines, but the level of turmoil here is massive. It speaks about the blatant refusal for heritage, then turns right around and immortalizes it in a photograph. This level of black and white acceptance and refusal is as upsetting as it is telling. Marvelous job doing so much with so little!
| Posted on 2019-12-28 00:00:00 | by Trufflepiggy | [ Reply to This ]


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