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    dots Submission Name: Asphalt and Steamdots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 75/191/252
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 45
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 807



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    dotsAsphalt and Steamdots
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    I forget from time to time
    that steam is not smoke
    as it roils from
    the heat
    across blacktop and concrete
    chasing shadows
    that lounge in the sky.
    Vapors of Summer
    tiny beads of sweat
    and rain
    which pour from the heavens,
    thoughts,
    pain and gain –
    I am soaked,
    drenched inside
    as the sun forsakes me
    on this auspicious day,
    this July.

    I forget from time to time
    that beauty of character is taken for granted –
    disgusted at rhetoric
    of which I am complicit,
    yet battle
    on forward –
    to admire;
    to admonish
    those of which deserve it.
    Self-righteously off topic
    as I ramble on
    only surface deep.




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