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    dots Submission Name: Ghosts of Our Umbral Heartdots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 75/191/252
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsGhosts of Our Umbral Heartdots
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    Dawn,
    stare into the morning ghosts –
    phantasmal shapes trapped in the ethereal
    fog, across pristine waters
    crawling through a fragile breath.
    The wind breathes, bathing specters
    of shadow, in chilling light
    as what was once yesterday,
    became today.

    That is what I have trained myself to think,
    as I stare at beauty
    and see only the black of ink
    unyielding in its presentation
    clinical in emotion
    and absent fog of objectivity –
    we feel what we feel,
    imagine what we imagine
    and die by that standard.

    Children trace shapes from clouds
    to which we’re ambivalent
    that they’ve yet to become
    the pessimist, the optimist
    or the cynic –
    yet to see faces in the fog
    so far beyond
    that they wish
    they were still with us.

    Dusk,
    listen to the uncertain umbra –
    beating to a heart without color,
    dead like fog
    across these, still –
    pristine waters.




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