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    dots Submission Name: Laudanum for the Cynicdots

    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 75/194/254
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsLaudanum for the Cynicdots

    Compose me a list
    describe to me the injustice,
    crimes that you perceive –
    nevertheless dismissed
    in the eyes of idiocy
    maligned like their fake God.

    It hitchhiked from below
    the cross roads
    along melody;
    along the Mason-Dixon
    and is outlined
    in the rubble on 16th Street,
    on the balcony of the Lorraine
    and every other face
    afraid that they too
    will drown in the rain,
    submerged –
    suffocated under blue reign
    such an indignation
    for hue, not merit or fame.

    They balk at this idea
    and claim what ails
    is of self manifestation;
    of own creation
    deserved damnation –
    or whatever shit
    comes to mind.

    Just drink,
    sit back and be benign –
    be silent and comply
    rest assure
    you will be cut out in due time.
    Set as an example,
    skull at the gate
    parody of crime and punishment
    drawn and quartered
    through mythos,
    opinion and measure.

    In a flash
    fire will free the truth
    like Guy Fawkes
    outlined the modern face –
    a symbol of recidivism
    for rebellions and rapscallions.
    Ticker tape parade
    manifested in Molotov’s,
    bricks, teargas and chains.
    Hope for Hong Kong –
    addicted to the silver lining;
    addicted to hope
    like a dying man,
    drinking laudanum
    as the cure for being a cynic.

    Submitted on 2019-11-02 22:13:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This speaks loudly about self-blame and humiliation, and a populace so eager to gobble it up. The lines "Just drink - just sit back and be benign" are particularly telling! 'Why yearn for something better when I can just bum around and swallow shame in liquor? It's my fault anyway, certainly not the gold-clad policy-makers.' You piece is direct, angry, and points the finger of blame exactly where it needs to go. Fantastic work!
    | Posted on 2019-12-28 00:00:00 | by Trufflepiggy | [ Reply to This ]

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