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    dots Submission Name: A thousanddots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    32/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/374/171
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 179
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsA thousanddots
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    You press on me
    skin
    brown, silk-like epiphany
    burnt under the sun
    white in the moonlight
    I trace your scars
    features, patterns
    of life beyond our recycled sheets
    your eyes,
    hazy,
    like almonds
    brittle on the lips
    but when I touch you
    your skin folds like light
    scattered on my glass window
    so when you saw me,
    seventy four days after
    we first met
    I was a thousand spectrum
    becoming in your eyes
    this is how you will love me.





    Submitted on 2019-11-06 10:21:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      More than two thousand years ago Catullus wrote, "Da Mi Basia Mille", give me a thousand kisses.

    I became bored after the first five kisses. And I imagine Catullus bored his lover to death.

    I think I would be prefer to be tickled to death, than kissed.

    | Posted on 2019-12-09 00:00:00 | by Torie | [ Reply to This ]


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